IELTS writings: Task1, Graph: Sea water [with teacher's corrections]

Thursday 12 February 2015

Task1, Graph: Sea water [with teacher's corrections]

The diagram below shows how salt is removed from sea water to make it drinkable. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

In my frank opinion[TA(1] , making sea water drinkable is quite complicated. I will try to describe this complex process in several dozen simple words.

Firstly, saltwater is transmitted into special pretreatment elaborate filters. Filtered water resources are forced through membrane at very high pressure and the rest of water is returned to sea. Water which didn't go through membrane is getting back [TA(2] (together with salt and impurities) to sea. Next step [TA(3] in making saltwater drinkable is to treat it with lime, chlorine and fluoride. The last part of desalination process is storing sparkling water. After some period of time desalinated water is being integrated with municipal water supply system.

108 words

This is underlength for a Task One. To make it longer, you could add an overview sentence, and you also needed to explain that some "backwash" is returned to the sea after the pretreatment stage.

[TA(1]This kind of expression is unnecessary in a part one task. It should stick to the facts, rather than contain opinions.

[TA(2]returned

[TA(3]The next step

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Task1, Graph: Sea water [with teacher's corrections]

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